Below is my first submitted draft with inline feedback from my professor. You can see from all the annotations that it wasn’t perfect and it had a lot of error. I struggled particularly hard with writing in past tense and instilling more details in the text. I didn’t realize I was doing it and when I received my peer reviews they also didn’t notice this. However, if you compare to the final I have applied the feedback and corrected the tense used. I’m happy to share my drafts as a learning tool for not only myself but maybe others.